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In The Blink of an Eye by thatwritr Reviewed by EdwardisaVILF
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Desiderata by Kimpy0464 was one of the first fanfic stories I ever read nearly two years ago. Since then I’ve read hundreds of stories (Hi, I’m Loving40s, and I’m a fichOOr!), and yet, I still remember Desiderata very clearly. That’s really saying a lot because there are many stories that I know that I’ve read, but I have no recollection of the plot or the characters — in other words, they were forgettable.
The story of Desiderata is set in Forks where Alice, Bella, and Emmett run a bakery together. Bella does the baking, Alice runs the storefront, while Emmett handles the financial part of the business. One day Edward Cullen, famous movie director, rolls into town to scout for a movie location, along with the star of his movie, actor Jasper Whitlock and Edward’s brassy assitant, Rosalie. Initially, Bella is stunned by Edward’s good looks, but then quickly realizes he is a haughty asshole. His impression of Bella isn’t much better.
The story is told in present tense, mainly from Bella and Edward’s points of view. However, the author also gives us glimpses into the Desiderata world from other beloved characters’ points of view, including Alice, Jasper, Rose, and Emmett. Bella’s character is very well developed. The reader gets to know the ins and outs of her personality, and what a personality she has! She is sweet, yet feisty and full of snarky wit. She’s quirky, wearing t-shirts with smart-ass comments on them, which reflect her mood for the day. Here’s a taste of Bella’s personality as she speaks to her best friend, Alice:
“Ali, I love you. You know I do. But you have to stop with the Obsessive Cullen Disorder shit right now. We aren’t destined to be together. He is Hollywood personified. I am a baker girl with famous buns from Forks, Washington. He is a total asshole. There is a chasm between us the size of the Grand Canyon, and never the twain shall meet. Savvy?”
I also greatly appreciated the author’s ability to articulate the utter lust and appreciation for Rob’s . . . erm, I mean, Edward’s . . . ridiculous hotness. In one scene, Bella does an internet search on Edward Cullen after meeting him briefly in the bakery. She watches an interview of him about one of his movies. This is her inner dialogue while watching him on the video:
“The next time he runs his fingers through his hair, I put the DVD on pause, so I can look at his hands. Edward Cullen has the longest, most elegant fingers in the history of man! I’ve never seen anything like them in my life. I press the slow-mo button, and he drags his hand down to the corners of his mouth, rubs it, and then rests his chin on his palm, with his fingers curled under his chin. I have no idea what has come over me, but I am having a complete tizzy attack over his fucking hands. Seriously, it has made me question being an atheist, because hands that beautiful had to be sculpted by god. It’s just a hand, but my mind is imagining all kinds of wicked things he could do.”
So much is right with Desiderata that I hate to even mention any cons, but it is the English teacher in me that requires me to do so. The story does contain some grammatical errors and tense confusion, but nothing so glaring as to make it unreadable. Also, some of the romantic dialogue is a bit cheesy in my opinion, but that is a very minor complaint. I believe that Desiderata is under read and underappreciated. If you’re a fan of Jane Austen’s Pride and Prejudice, then this story is a must-read because it is loosely based on that beloved classic.
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