Twi-Fics’ Picks 7/17/2011

Twi-Fics’ Picks: In The Blink of an Eye and Desiderata
 

We’d like to extend a warm welcome to all visitors, and a special welcome to any recently displaced PattinAngelz who have come over from RAoR.  Thank you so much for giving Twi-Fic Reviews a chance to fill your fanfic needs.   We are very aware that we can’t fill the shoes of the Hoorfessor of Smutology, DeeDreamer.  Most of us came to trust her recommendations implicitly.  We hope, in time, that you we will earn your trust as well.  For the time being, your weekly Sinday recs will be by me, Loving40s, as well as by EdwardisaVILF, co-creator of this site.  We’d love to have some guest reviewers from time to time, so let us know if you’re interested.   

In the spirit of TwiSmut Sindays at RAoR, we invite you to comment and share with us your own recs, including any WIPs that are currently pwning you.  Though we’ll only be reviewing and rec’ing completed stories each Sunday, we do want to keep an eye on any hot WIPs out there, so rec anything you want.  Just click on “Comments” in red at the end of this post to both see comments and leave a comment. 

We’re trying to find a way to display only the Twi-Fics’ Picks post, but right now it is showing another post below it.  Please be patient with us as we work the kinks out of getting the Twi-Fics’ Pick Sunday post to be the only post on the home page.  Read on, ladies  — we’ve got two fantastic stories for you today!

   

In The Blink of an Eye by thatwritr
Reviewed by EdwardisaVILF 

    

   

In the Blink of an Eye by thatwritr was completed in January 2010, so it may have fallen off your fanfiction radar.  However, this is one story that shouldn’t be forgotten. This is one emotional rollercoaster not to miss. The story is a departure from New Moon and breaks away from canon at the point where Bella pulls her cliff diving stunt.  In this version of events, Bella breaks her back during the cliff dive and becomes paralyzed.  Fast forward ten years:  Bella is a happily married paraplegic when a devastating turn of events brings Edward back into her life.  But will Bella be happy to see him? 
  
This story caught my attention because it is so very REAL. Here we have a broken Bella, physically imperfect, and emotionally drained after the loss of her husband, Mark.  The author introduces us to this original character in a way that makes you genuinely like the guy and his humanity. He’s not Edward, and he doesn’t have to be.   
  
Throughout the story Bella continually struggles with life in a wheelchair, while Edward learns to let her struggle, to do things on her own. While the author could leave it there, she delves deeper, describing personal physical issues that paraplegics face which most of us take for granted.  This Bella is strong, spunky, and will not be daunted.   
  
Edward, who only re-enters Bella’s life after the accident, finally learns that life is messy and not everything can be fixed. He must learn to accept Bella’s disabilities despite his own perfect physicality.  But, most of all, he must learn to be Bella’s friend and nothing more while she grieves. Also, you will see the Cullens, especially Rosalie, in a whole new light which is quite refreshing.    
  
Thatwritr lets her readers truly feel. Her writing style is elegant and flows beautifully. Her way of describing emotion cuts through all fanciful notions and leaves her readers raw. Don’t let the fact that this is AU deter you from reading.  In the Blink of an Eye is surprisingly human.  You won’t be disappointed.   
 

Have you read In The Blink of an Eye?  Click HERE to rate the story.


Desiderata by Kimpy0464
Reviewed by Loving40s
 

Desiderata by Kimpy0464 was one of the first fanfic stories I ever read nearly two years ago. Since then I’ve read hundreds of stories (Hi, I’m Loving40s, and I’m a fichOOr!), and yet, I still remember Desiderata very clearly. That’s really saying a lot because there are many stories that I know that I’ve read, but I have no recollection of the plot or the characters — in other words, they were forgettable.     

The story of Desiderata is set in Forks where Alice, Bella, and Emmett run a bakery together. Bella does the baking, Alice runs the storefront, while Emmett handles the financial part of the business. One day Edward Cullen, famous movie director, rolls into town to scout for a movie location, along with the star of his movie, actor Jasper Whitlock and Edward’s brassy assitant, Rosalie. Initially, Bella is stunned by Edward’s good looks, but then quickly realizes he is a haughty asshole. His impression of Bella isn’t much better.      

The story is told in present tense, mainly from Bella and Edward’s points of view. However, the author also gives us glimpses into the Desiderata world from other beloved characters’ points of view, including Alice, Jasper, Rose, and Emmett.  Bella’s character is very well developed. The reader gets to know the ins and outs of her personality, and what a personality she has! She is sweet, yet feisty and full of snarky wit. She’s quirky, wearing t-shirts with smart-ass comments on them, which reflect her mood for the day. Here’s a taste of Bella’s personality as she speaks to her best friend, Alice:     

“Ali, I love you. You know I do. But you have to stop with the Obsessive Cullen Disorder shit right now. We aren’t destined to be together. He is Hollywood personified. I am a baker girl with famous buns from Forks, Washington. He is a total asshole. There is a chasm between us the size of the Grand Canyon, and never the twain shall meet. Savvy?”     

I also greatly appreciated the author’s ability to articulate the utter lust and appreciation for Rob’s . . . erm, I mean, Edward’s . . . ridiculous hotness. In one scene, Bella does an internet search on Edward Cullen after meeting him briefly in the bakery. She watches an interview of him about one of his movies. This is her inner dialogue while watching him on the video:      

“The next time he runs his fingers through his hair, I put the DVD on pause, so I can look at his hands. Edward Cullen has the longest, most elegant fingers in the history of man! I’ve never seen anything like them in my life. I press the slow-mo button, and he drags his hand down to the corners of his mouth, rubs it, and then rests his chin on his palm, with his fingers curled under his chin. I have no idea what has come over me, but I am having a complete tizzy attack over his fucking hands. Seriously, it has made me question being an atheist, because hands that beautiful had to be sculpted by god. It’s just a hand, but my mind is imagining all kinds of wicked things he could do.”     

So much is right with Desiderata that I hate to even mention any cons, but it is the English teacher in me that requires me to do so.  The story does contain some grammatical errors and tense confusion, but nothing so glaring as to make it unreadable.  Also, some of the romantic dialogue is a bit cheesy in my opinion, but that is a very minor complaint.  I believe that Desiderata is under read and underappreciated.  If you’re a fan of Jane Austen’s Pride and Prejudice, then this story is a must-read because it is loosely based on that beloved classic.     

Have you read Desiderata?  Click HERE to rate the story.

   

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37 Responses to Twi-Fics’ Picks 7/17/2011

  1. Ally says:

    Hello Ladies! I’m first? Surely not..

    Great recs – I can’t believe I have not read either of these stories.. two more for my TBR list YAY!

    This week I have read If Love Could Light a Candle by Patische Pen http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5022358/1/If_Love_Could_Light_a_Candle I think Dee spotlighted this story a while ago which is why I had it on my list. Anyhoo, I loved this.. it follows canon closely, but with a fabulous twist and it is so beautifully written. If you like a Vamp fic, its a great read. Complete.

    The next story I loved is a WIP – Breach by Catastrophia http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6771746/1/Breach This story is not lovey dovey.. it’s raw, hot and a bit of a ride. But I love it! I am a bit of a sucker for a broken Edward, and Breachward is no exception.

    Thanks to ladies for creating a new way for us to have our Sinday recs.. it is really appreciated!! oxo AV

    • Loving40s says:

      Louise, I’m so glad to see you stopped by. I can vouch for If Love Could Light a Candle…great read.

      Never heard of Breach by Catastrophia. Sounds great…thanks.

      • Sus says:

        Shelli….could you please tell me the name of the story that has Amishward in it? Guess it’s Edward as an Amish man? I saw it somewhere, and didn’t write it down!

        TIA,
        Sus

    • Nicole says:

      LOL, Ally I was going to rec’d *Breach*, but glad to see it is up here!

      @Loving40′s…Nice Sunday FF posting. Internet here has been off and on (OOC), but I finally made it on.

      Those two stories you rec’d sounded really good. I will fave and def make a note on both of them. :)

      • Loving40s says:

        Oh , yay, they’re both new to you, huh? Awesome! I’ve also read and loved In The Blink of an Eye, so I vouch for both of them. So glad you stopped by!

      • Ally says:

        Nicole – hello my love! I knew you would love Breach too.. great minds think alike!

    • bookmarked Ally…question…is breach an okay to read during a two hour car pool ride with co workers on me kindle? lol…I don’t need to be moaning out sitting on a van loaded full of my coworkers…haha

      • Ally says:

        RHM, I would say ..no to the carpooling… I think you would be squiriming in your seat, bb!!

        It’s pretty damn hot!

  2. EdwardisaVilf says:

    Hey there Ally! *waves madly* Those are some great recs. I haven’t read either one, but I will now.

    Also, thank you for all the support you have given our new site. Glad to see you stopping by for sinday recs. :)

    • Ally says:

      Hi There EdwardisaVilf! Gotta say, love your avatar.. that is one of my favorite photos.. ooh sorry I digress!!

      I have to thank you and loving40s for creating this fab site, I love it. I have a friend who is just getting into FF and I have given her the site to browse through, and she told me she was on there for three hours!! LOL FF is so addictive. AV oxo

  3. FluffyLiz says:

    Hey ladies. First let me say thanks so much for setting up your site to give us a Sinday recs post – I know there are other rec sites, but there’s something about Sundays which make it the best day for checking out the latest fics that everyone’s enjoying.

    I’ve just finished “A Thousand Leaves” (there’s a very handy link at the top of this page!) and thoroughly enjoyed it – I’ve left a review here too, as well as one for “Blink of an Eye” which I thought was brilliant. It’s a very different take on the traditional story and I loved it – it certainly passes the test of remembering it well after reading.

    • Loving40s says:

      FluffyLiz is here! SQUEEE! So glad you came by! I have A Thousand Leaves on my TBR list since Dee rec’d it. So many to read, so little time!

    • Sus says:

      Hi Lizzie…
      I read “A Thousand Leaves” as well, and absolutely loved it! Glad you all are here!

      xoSus

  4. Louise says:

    Hello ladies, great to be here and thanks for doing this so we can still get our sinday dose of all things naughty!!!
    I have just read ‘a thousand leaves’ too – awesome read like Liz said and also I have just finished ‘repentance’ and ‘what if’, both awesome reads, I read a lot but these two just reminded why – both kept me hanging on and unable to stop, repentance comes with a warning but my god it had everything to keep you enthralled – I haven’t read a fic in a while where I truly wanted to cry and scream at what I was reading!!!
    I have PDFs of both these so email me if you want one, surjon@bigpond.com

    Trying to work out my next read so might try one of the above, happy sinday lovelies xx

  5. Drizl says:

    Hey ladies(and boyz if there’s any around)…nice to see some familiar avis/names…been so busy writing haven’t had much time for reading lately. Hopefully, I’ll have some reading under my belt next Sinday…Flove you all, Drizl

    • Loving40s says:

      So glad you came by, Drizl. It looks like we’re off to a slow start, but hopefully more RAoR fichOOrs will find their way here.

  6. xpreadmywings says:

    Hellooo!!! Awww home sweet home with all my angelz h00rs sista!
    Thank you loving and edwardisa for having opened this safe haven for us RAoR orphans!
    You are my heroes!

    Well…I haven’t read those 2 so…I need a vamp life to get my TBR list thru LOL
    Ok, I know I told you I despise WiPs but… OMG I was taken the minute I read the 1st chapter of Clockwork by Derdriu oFaolain and now am totally pwned! Ok, I reckon not everyone is in for timetravel stories but this one tsk tsk tsk…
    Clockwork is angsty and intense and sooo very well written!!! She offers not only B’s POV but also E’s!
    Here a lil teaser:
    “By the time Edward had journeyed through all the layers of her clothing, kissing her intermittently as he did so, she was entirely at his mercy. His movements were furious and commanding, and somehow infused with love and grief and trust all at the same time. He explored the geometry of her body—first around the smooth curve of her shoulders, then down over her chest, then lower, endlessly lower, until she could feel nothing at all but him.

    He divided her like a man charging through a forest, madly bending back branches to reach the edge. She felt him everywhere, his skin, the movement of his muscles, fiercely drawing her closer as if he sought to occupy her exact point in space. They moved together until they lost touch with their surroundings, until they had no beginning and no end.”

    Trust me, don’t let the quantum physics references bug you, they serve to show the progression of E&B relay… can you tell am excited? *blushing*
    Also The Prickle Boat House by Lois Williams, because…she’s 1 of my Robsten angels.
    LOL come and meet bastardward and tell me all about it!

    Clockwork
    Bella is a scientist in 1942. In 2010, Edward suffers from a traumatic past. A chance event allows their paths to cross, but decisions they have not yet made threaten to tear them apart. AH
    http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5996248/1/

    The Prickle Boat House
    “There you go again. Nice comment from someone who only wanted to have sex on New Years and Memorial Day.” AH
    http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7082832/2/The_Pickle_Boat_House#

    Again *wipe a lil tear* thank you thank you sweeties and hello all lost sista h00rs, come around!

    • Loving40s says:

      OMG, thank you for these recs. Both new to me, and I will read ANYTHING Derdriu writes because I loved her other story And With Thee Fade Away. It is one of the best AU’s I’ve ever read. So glad you came by, xspread!

    • Foxy57 says:

      Great recs! Love Clockwork and will have to put Prickle on the never ending list. Thank you loving and edwardisa for keeping this going!

    • travelteachr says:

      Clockwork is a great story, so interesting. I thought I would get lost with the physics of time travel, but she keeps it pretty simple and sooooo interesting. I am waiting on pins and needles for her to update again!
      Haven’t read Desiderata, I will check that one out. Glad there is another place to come for Sunday Recs.

  7. kalaekalae says:

    Thank you ;-)
    Great recs…
    <3

  8. Nicole says:

    Loving40′s so nice of you to set up a Sunday FF posting for us!!! I guess the PattinAngelz/H00rs just got so used to Sinday/Sunday, that even though we have other FF’s sites to go to, and boards for other days, there is nothing like Sunday for us! We appreciate it and I hope more ladies make it on today.

    Just a couple I want to highly rec’d that are WIP’s…

    “In Your World”…AmishWard. This FF is so sweet and romantic. The author does put alot of research into the Amish and the story seems to be pretty historically accurate. This Edward is so damn adorable and loving, and the UST will kill you at times, but it is so worth the read. *she does throw you a small bone here and there in the lemons dept…as they are both virgins.* Written by a RAoR Angelz..I knew her writing as Lost Luggage on Twilighted and I believe she is a friend of another of our Angelz…Scilla. *Speaking of, I sure miss her and her lovely story OTI*.

    Character(s): Bella & Edward
    Genre(s): Romance/Drama
    Rating: Rated: M
    Summary: Bella is running from her life when it takes an unexpected detour, To
    Amish Country in rural Iowa where she finds sanctuary with a caring family.
    And meets a man who draws her into his world. Welcome to the world of
    Amishward.

    http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6811278/1/

    The other FF I’m going to rec’d is by Magnolia822…you may know her as the writer of the Cullen,s-Sutra…very good story. This one is lively and funny. I look for humor and snark when I need a change of pace from all the BDSM I read, and being I adore cooking and come from a family of Italians that own restraunts and catering businesses, so I love stuff that involves one of my passions.

    “An Acquired Taste”

    Character(s): Bella & Edward
    Genre(s): Romance/Humor
    Rating: Rated: M
    Summary: Arrogant British celebrity chef Edward Cullen made an impression on
    NYC caterer Bella Swan long before either one of them became a success. Now,
    armed with her cat and a devious practical joke, Bella’s plan may turn up the
    heat for both of them. ExB OOC

    http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7000756/1/

    • Loving40s says:

      OMG, Nicole, what fantastic recs! No, I haven’t read them but I just know they’re good. LOL! I read the first few chaps of one of Lost Luggage’s RPF stories over at Twilighted and was hooked, but i made myself stop reading it until it completes. Anyway, so I know she’s a good write. I did’t know she had another story going on right now.

      And I will read ANYTHING for magnolia822. OMG, I love ALL her stories and I wasn’t aware of the one you rec’d. Going on my TBR list.

      Thanks so much!

    • xpreadmywings says:

      Carissima Nicole, come stai bella? WOW Tell me of one single soul who doesn’t like Amishward? Awww…I didn’t know solost and I msg’d her after reading the 1st chap and toled her I wld never take a WiP again, after the fiasco w/Coming Home, The Guardian, Blind Faith, Camisado, etc etc but I was ready to give her a vote of confidence! And she was soooo sweet in replying to me! And gosh, I never never regretted taking it! Their journey thru the country, discovering each other *fanning self and rolling eyes* WOW!
      Hum…An Acquired Taste eh? Me loves some cooking so…another one fo the ever long TBR list!
      Grazie tanti!

    • Sus says:

      Thanks, Nic…I was looking for this one! Love a good Amish tale!

      xoSus

  9. Loving40s says:

    FYI. . .just wanted to say that I’m aware that comments are being held for moderation, so that’s whats happening if you don’t see your comment posted right away.

    I’m about to pull my hair out here because I unchecked the box to ALLOW comments to post immediately and not be held for moderation, BUT IT IS STILL HOLDING THEM. Argh!

    Be patient with us as we work out the kinks here! Thanks!

  10. woo hoo….its not like I don’t have a long enough list we just keep this going and going….we are worse than crack pipe smoking addicts yall do realize that don’t you?
    puff puff pass…

    here is my rec….
    I just finished COUNTERPOINT!
    HOLY H E DOUBLE L! that story settled in at number two on my top ten favorites…knocking fifty shades down to third…why you ask….
    Fifty dark is sexy…no doubt….
    Innocent Virgin… blushing hormone driven sixteen year old Edward is just….
    there simply are no words to describe this boy…I have no shame…he is too adorable for words…and the Carlisle in this story will steal your heart just like Edward does…
    An EPIC father figure!
    It is angsty in the middle but so well worth it…I fell hard for this Edward and am still swooning….

    Now the polar opposite….

    I only read chapter one but what a chapter it was that I ran over here to recc it also….
    Heartbreak Remedy…
    I have no idea what its about all I know is the lemon in that first chapter had ME blushing! as if that were possible!
    Just GAH!

    links

    heartbreak remedy
    http://www.thewriterscoffeeshop.com/library/viewstory.php?sid=1634

    Counterpoint

    http://sleepyvalentina.com/counterpoint

    thanks loving for the place to hang on sinday!

    • Loving40s says:

      You crack me up, Robshandmonkey! Hey, if you ever want to be a guest reviewer, let me know. Your excitement about the stories you rec’d is contagious. So glad you’re here!

      Ditto, ditto about Counterpoint. I do rec to you who haven’t read it, that you read read Art AFter 5 first. It is from Bella’s POV and Counterpoint is EPOV. Both are fantastic, and no, it is not repetitive reading Counterpoint. Author does an amazing job with that.

      • your wish my command…you let me know when and who and what and I will be there with Bells on….I feel honored!

        well not Bells…I prefer Edward…*snickers…

  11. tarajo23 says:

    Woohoo! I am so excited to see rec’s! I am thrilled to have Twific and thank Shelli for it!!

    I have been rereading one of my very favorites this week! I am unconditionally and irrevocably in love with TeamBella23′s trilogy Closer, California Waiting and Crawl. It is absolutely the greatest!! I can read them over and over and over again!!

    I have read a couple WIPS that I will pass on. I am eagerly awaiting updates!

    INSIDE MAN by OOZA
    With his parole fast approaching, inmate Edward Masen is looking for a friend. College student Bella Swan stumbles across his profile on a prison pen-pal website. Their friendship is formed over written words, but will it last once he rejoins her world?
    http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7043140/1/Inside_Man

    BROKEN HEADBOARDS, POWER PANTIES, AND PENIS CHARMS by NYDDI
    A lonely man. The young, beautiful, obnoxiously horny girl he swore to protect. Question is, how did he protect her from himself? MASSIVE PERVERTEDNESS ON BEHALF OF THE FACEBOOK HUSSY SQUAD COMING RIGHT UP! { this is some great smut!! :) }
    http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6896020/1/Broken_Headboards_Power_Panties_and_Penis_Charms

  12. Loving40s says:

    Tarajo23, you are so welcome! Thank you for coming by and please help us spread the word about Twi-Fics’ Picks every Sunday. Thanks for the recs, too. OMG, just the title of that 2nd one peaks my interest! LOL

  13. justsayin says:

    Ahhh, a new home to encourage my incredibly unproductive sinday tradition. Fantastic!

    Love this WIP:
    All the Wild Horses by elusivetwilight
    http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6435667/1/All_the_Wild_Horses
    In her suffocating small hometown, Bella Swan meets widowed Edward Cullen. Can she pull him from the depths of his grief? Is there enough of him left to soothe her clawing loneliness? AUAH E&B.
    Twilight – Rated: M – English – Romance/Angst – Chapters: 23 – Words: 85,778 – Reviews: 4592 – Updated: 7-14-11 –
    Published: 10-29-10 – Bella & Edward

    Small town Bella and Rancher-ward, both nursing broken hearts. This story has a great feel to it with the author illustrating a picturesque view of farming life. Sexy lemons too. A new chapter was posted this week, but I should note that update frequency is a tad unpredictable. So if you’re an impatient WIP reader, I’d recommend waiting for it to complete. The good news is that (though the author has not given any indication) I think we’re in the falling action of the plot, so it’ll probably be completed fairly soon.

  14. Sus says:

    From “The Writer’s Coffee Shop” I rec “WILD”, by PeppahLouie. Edward is an exec chef who owns an upscale restaurant with Alice in Seattle. Bella comes to work for them, and of course, sparks fly….it is a WIP, although it’s nearing the end. Sorry, but I am a dumb hOOr, and don’t know how to send links…please teach me!!!
    xoSus

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